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Liz ([identity profile] mythtaken.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] biffy 2009-04-26 09:59 pm (UTC)

'Tis more fun to stick him back together with Jared tape.
Jared is a big flowery sticking plaster. ALL BETTER NOW.

1. Jared MUST be a total fanboy so there's the massivest possible difference between his expectations and reality - either this is a thing Jared has to struggle to come to terms with or it is the cause of MORE angst for Jensen because he doesn't want to be a disappointment or it is the impetus for Jensen to improve himself OR a subtle combination of all of the above.
2. Do do do keep Jensen being a miserable whiskey-soaked fuck up, but I think you should draw out revealing the reasons behind it (maybe rather than telling us he spoke to his sister, actually give us the conversation, but without us knowing the full context of what they're talking about?). TEASE US MOAR.

But of course, I just used the word "massivest", so feel free to ignore me when it comes to writing advice.

It will not be painful Sylv, it will be GLORIOUS. *pats*


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